Charlie II

12:30 am . Derrik Derrik was bored. In a room, all on his own, without a TV he was stuck. There wasn't even any booze in the room. Shit. Looking ...

Derrik heard Dave bustling about in the kitchen and turned off the TV. Derrik had already found the small amount of liquor that the house held, and glugged it down ...

Okay *puts on rubber gloves* lets critique! My gaze was removed from Rick's face and now bore into the woman's face. Removed sounds like someone else did it. Maybe 'switiched' ...

Like I said, I'm expecting pieces of eight for this: The sun bore down, warming his face. Ok, first sentence is always the hardest. This assumes that we already partially ...

Derrik grinned as Keri flung open the back doors of the van and rumaged throught the equipment to find something suitable for blackmailing. Dave looked horrified. "Now lets see," Keri ...

Convicts: You guys have your own thing going on; post at will. Will do. Also, TNcowgirl, do you need to be worked into the convicts plot somewhere? I've noticed you've ...

The taxi drive had been brilliant! Derrik just wished that he'd had the fortune to have been allowed a camera. The face of the driver had been pure gold after ...

Derrik whistled tunelessly as he was walked along the dark corridor of the prison. The guard handcuffed to him on his right grimaced but did not stop him. Derrik paused, ...

NAME: Derrik Clement AGE: 17 EYES: Blind in his right eye, it’s a cloudy white colour. Left eye is ice-blue. HAIR: Shoulder length dark brown hair. Both eyes are visible ...

its let a perfect in it sway I found that one difficult to understand too! I don't think this is a direct attack on spellchecking. It's more of a warning ...

Nice! This certainly shows up the people who try hard in the literary forums. It's a lot better than just having a number of posts (well, it makes me feel ...

On the wall of our form room we had a small, but funny, poster put up by one of the English teachers who were annoyed with us getting spellings wrong ...

Hey there Anna! Good to see you found someone to give you a hand. Hope you'll enjoy your stay here and help us all out with out writing. DarkLight

I said I'd critique it! So here I am: The girl hair was very short and had lost the shine that once outlined it. The hair was dirty and messed ...

Peer group pressure forces me to say: Boy! DarkLight